A Level project: Feedback to film rough cut

I have showed the rough cut of the short film to several people in an effort to batter understand what i should be adding to it. The following is the list of the people i have shown the short film to, their specific involvement in the project and their opinions on it.

Evelin Hutton (Media Studies Tutor): She said that it was coming along nicely however i should absolutely add music, keep the focus on the bears with including more clips of them, as well as to add screenshots i took of articles that i researched. She also advised me to make this post.

Anna Chereches (my sister and creative/technical advisor): She told me that the title card should encompass all of the screen instead of dissolving into the middle of the screen during the opening sequence. However as this is merely an aesthetic decision i decided against following this advice as i believe it is batter if the audience isn't completely taken out of the natural atmosphere by the black and white title card and instead it briefly appears during the opening sequence but doesn't hijack the whole frame.

Emese Molvar Kovacs (my mother and creative advisor/producer): She mentioned that i should also add more of the footage with the bears as the current rough cut that she saw was mostly filled with landscape shots of romania. She also advised me of using a second cut for the opening sequence as there was a moment where a little motion blur was visible in the rough cut that the second cut of the same clip did not have.

Marius Chereches (my father and producer): He told me that he believed the narration and script to be vary well done. He also suggested adding subtitles to make the short film more consumable and comprehensive.